I have to say that starting off as a freshmen at Moanalua highschool my writing was quite BLUNT, BORING, AND PREDICTABLE. All I did was write what was needed to be written. But I never thought that the my "okay grades" and my writings didn't intrest people was because my pieces were sooo BORING. Now I understand what catches people's attentions and what helps me become a better writer. My writing has improved a lot. My writings have much better VOCABULARY. I actually improved a lot in my vocab, I use much bigger WORDS NOW!^___^ OHH and my writings are much more fun and interesting to read!
My writing goals:
TO EXCEL IN MY WRITING
To improve in VOICE
Make my writing good enough for me to write in the school newspaper
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Hi Cynthia,
ReplyDeleteThose are great goals…I look forward to seeing your byline in the Na Hoku
In the meantime, you can write excellent VOs for your broadcast packages.
Now, on to your pro con assessment: You have a definite thesis, one that you feel strongly about. You present two arguments to back it up—not all teens have the latest in cell phone technology and the possibility of distraction is not worth the educational benefit of using phones in class.
You present some support for your arguments, but the support could be more specific. It would probably also be helpful to consider other tech tools besides the cell phone, since both articles did not limit themselves to a single tool.
mrs s